This week I'm dedicating my story to my sister/friend Regina who would never have carried this particular guilt.
“I’ll never forgive you!” Bang! The door slammed behind him.
Troy’s slouched form dwindled to a speck and disappeared over the hill.
Regina grabbed a bowl and went out to her garden. Like crimson jewels, bulging raspberries, dripping with morning dew, begged to be plucked and eaten.
Daily tasks were not enough to occupy her mind or quell her longing for his arms.
At 3:30 the back door opened and shut. He came back!
“Raspberry cobbler? Yum!” Fourteen-year-old Troy hugged her. “Sorry I yelled at you, Mom.”
“It’s okay. I should’ve asked before I threw away your old teddy bear.”
awh...this is a nice scene. They do have a great relationship though, mom and son...despite thrown away teddies and yelling. Very human.
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http://writersclubkl.wordpress.com/2012/06/29/friday-fictioneers-valentine/
Very good, feel like I have lived through this when I tossed out my daughters treasured tennis shoes. Mine is here for those who caare to come by: http://oldentimes.wordpress.com/2012/06/29/friday-fictioneers-collecting-jewels/
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ReplyDeleteForgiveness is as sweet as raspberry cobbler. I enjoyed being led from bait to switch and wanton lust to wholesome love all in 100 words. Very well done.
Thanks for stopping by Here and Now. i'm headed back there to reply to your kind comments.
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Doug
Is it any wonder I look forward to your comments? Thanks Doug.
Deletewow..what a forgiving family. Only cherry pie could get me to forgive my teddy bear being thrown away ;-)
ReplyDeleteOh, I like it! "Dripping with morning dew" makes those jewels appear so succulent and fresh. Clever story, I enjoyed.
ReplyDeleteWe're on the list, or here: http://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/fight-or-flight
Nice twist, I wasn't expecting it to be her son that would never come back. You played me like a fiddle.
ReplyDeleteMine: http://adamickes.wordpress.com/2012/06/29/berry-tester/
Captured typical family life perfectly. My girls could slam door just as hard. ;-)
ReplyDeleteHere's mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/may-the-punishment-fit/
Much can be mended by a lovely raspberry cobbler...
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To err is human, to forgive divine. (cliche?) beautifully and sweetly told with a loving twist. Kudos! Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/06/29/fridayfictioneers-seduction/
ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful slice of life with a child trying to find their way to adulthood. Nicely told--loved how Doud said it--I can only echo his sentiments.
ReplyDeleteWow I did not expect to see a Mother and Son. Nicely done. Very nicely done. This is me over here: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/06/flash-fictioneer-friday-berries-and-pip.html
ReplyDeleteA good image of the woes and pains of motherhood and the relationships often in need of TLC. Good story.
ReplyDeleteI forgot to add my link to my blog where my FF story for this week is posted. It is a bit different than my previous ones, a little on the lighter side, and was fun. Always loved doing children's stories.
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Nothing beats a mother's love.
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Such drama! Fourteen's the really difficult beginning of all the rest of life. I'm on the list.
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You must be back in blogspot's good graces, Annie. Glad you like it. Thanks for stopping by. .
DeleteSweet and heartwarming. Tricky you. I thought it was your husband also. Hope Regina enjoys your little story as well.
ReplyDeleteOuch, this is like a flashback. When I was about 12, Mom gave my bear away. I was crushed. She'd given it to me when I was 5, a souvenir from her trip to Kansas City. It took more than one cobbler to help me get over that. I milked it for all it was worth :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for the sweet comment on mine.
Really sweet - loved it. If only it were that easy to get round a sulking child... :)
ReplyDeleteMine's at http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/06/29/forbidden-friday-fictioneers-june-2012/
True story. But hey, you do what you gotta do in 100 words.
DeleteAwww...this is so sweet and tugging at the heart. Well done!!! Thanks so much for stopping by mine http://boomiebol.wordpress.com/2012/06/28/the-poison-friday-fictioneers-628/
ReplyDeleteVery realistic and true to life. Well expressed. I like the bit of mystery, not knowing what the relationship was, boyfriend-girlfriend, husband-wife, etc. until the end, discovering it was mother-son. Great story.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your comment on my story.
http://ebooksscifi.wordpress.com/2012/06/29/telestial-by-ilyan-kei-lavanway-for-madison-woods-friday-fictioneers-100-word-flash-fiction
An old teddy bear...I'd be upset tool. And cobbler, with vanilla icecream? Yup, that'd make it all better.
ReplyDeleteI love that it turned out to be her son. Nice story, and the twist was very well done!
ReplyDeleteI liked this turn of the usual fare for you Rochelle. It shows you're a very versatile writer! Realistic and touching. And made me hungry.
ReplyDeleteYou definitely captured the mother's plight - "daily tasks are not enough" - how often we escape into the mundane so we can bear the present pain. Good job!
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