tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post5348884410410746622..comments2024-03-08T08:33:02.582-08:00Comments on Paintbrush, Pen and Keyboard: ARSONRochelle Wisoff-Fieldshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00090374697915874481noreply@blogger.comBlogger34125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-66981409549960926782012-07-15T19:25:21.662-07:002012-07-15T19:25:21.662-07:00I said "Ohhh" aloud when I read that las...I said "Ohhh" aloud when I read that last line about Angela's cigarette. Very powerful. Well done, Rochelle.<br /><br />Thanks for your nice comments about mine and congrats on landing an agent!<br /><br />http://banterwithbeth.blogspot.comBethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16685726789687443442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-278989423446883082012-07-15T13:54:00.844-07:002012-07-15T13:54:00.844-07:00I suspect Angela did something to start the fire.I suspect Angela did something to start the fire.Sonia Lalhttp://storytreasury.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-58531166219226214702012-07-14T13:19:04.377-07:002012-07-14T13:19:04.377-07:00What guilt she must feel. Strong emotional story, ...What guilt she must feel. Strong emotional story, Rochelle.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-50520597865491816212012-07-14T11:39:15.869-07:002012-07-14T11:39:15.869-07:00Nicely done, She will have a hard time sleeping at...Nicely done, She will have a hard time sleeping at night with that guilt. Thank you for stopping by my place and the kind words.<br />Here is mine for others to read yaralwrites.comAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-18544846514940307072012-07-14T11:18:45.939-07:002012-07-14T11:18:45.939-07:00Congratulations on the book, Rochelle. That's ...Congratulations on the book, Rochelle. That's a huge accomplishment and I'm very happy for you!<br /><br />Now, back to the story. The title, "Arson" would imply that the fire was intentional. The last line leads me to believe that she is sorry for the consequences of her actions. Quite a compelling little tale.<br /><br />Thanks for the nice comment on mine. Here's the link for other buzzard lovers. http://russellgayer.blogspot.com/Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02951989303915273807noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-9289773628048498982012-07-14T09:14:16.498-07:002012-07-14T09:14:16.498-07:00Yes, well, smoking does kill, doesn't it? Usua...Yes, well, smoking does kill, doesn't it? Usually in a more insidious manner. Will Angela ever come clean?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-20734505882366168532012-07-14T06:21:15.211-07:002012-07-14T06:21:15.211-07:00Great story! Well done!Great story! Well done!Mary Shipmanhttp://www.oldentimes.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-1553269554933015172012-07-14T04:56:33.281-07:002012-07-14T04:56:33.281-07:00This one was brilliant. Good plot and very well-w...This one was brilliant. Good plot and very well-written. With the added bit at the end, which was a surprise. I like it very much.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-61973198425166442942012-07-14T01:03:52.857-07:002012-07-14T01:03:52.857-07:00Rocks!
Enjoyed your story. Looking forward to t...Rocks!<br /> Enjoyed your story. Looking forward to the next one.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-63187695524781813362012-07-13T22:08:14.949-07:002012-07-13T22:08:14.949-07:00A lesson hard learned, indeed. Well written! Tha...A lesson hard learned, indeed. Well written! Thank you for sharing.<br /><br />~Susan (www.susanwenzel.com)Susan Wenzelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05441251619321494571noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-43397796337396960352012-07-13T16:56:41.015-07:002012-07-13T16:56:41.015-07:00The tone of this story read the recollections of a...The tone of this story read the recollections of a trauma victim. Which is a tone I LOVED. The third person took me out of it a little bit, however. I think the punch would have been harder in the first person. <br /><br />But as it is, it is a *very* strong piece. Well done!<br /><br />This is my link: http://quillshiv.com/2012/07/12/lady-of-war/Quill Shivhttp://quillshiv.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-67498422004814461732012-07-13T15:51:52.279-07:002012-07-13T15:51:52.279-07:00Nice construction, well rounded story with a punch...Nice construction, well rounded story with a punch. Well done and all the best with your writing.<br />http://wp.me/s1nUrn-buzzardAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-57145660734503147742012-07-13T11:09:13.435-07:002012-07-13T11:09:13.435-07:00I liked how this one snuck up on me. I wasn't...I liked how this one snuck up on me. I wasn't expecting the last line, and it made me go back and re-evaluate the narrator's role in the fire. Great piece!<br />cheers,<br />Lorelei<br />www.westcoastwriters.blogspot.comLoreleihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07912727189990782170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-8420184413392788262012-07-13T09:31:31.564-07:002012-07-13T09:31:31.564-07:00I never understood the fascination with smoking in...I never understood the fascination with smoking in the bathroom... What a powerful story Rochelle. I pity the bird most though, the hunting ground it used to haunt are now gone. Mine is over here and on the list. http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/07/friday-fictioneers-for-power.htmlAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01364381351816604082noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-34381876743217452762012-07-13T07:20:31.559-07:002012-07-13T07:20:31.559-07:00That gray balloons line was great.That gray balloons line was great.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-29284751480587160502012-07-13T07:10:42.550-07:002012-07-13T07:10:42.550-07:00Powerful, evocative and a lesson learnt. Good shot...Powerful, evocative and a lesson learnt. Good shot. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/07/13/fridayfictioneers-spectators/Reading Pleasurehttp://readinpleasure.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-38588109472234409552012-07-13T03:13:23.359-07:002012-07-13T03:13:23.359-07:00Dear Rochelle,
You're going to have to change...Dear Rochelle,<br /><br />You're going to have to change you blog/bio intro now! Ha! Congratulations again.<br /><br />The last line of your story so excellently tied things up that I read the whole story again just to experience the ride. Grim, sad, poignant and so, so true to your characters. Great job.<br /><br />Thank you for visiting Roadkill and commenting so nicely. My link below is for others still smoking.<br /><br />Aloha,<br /><br />Doug<br /><br />http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/07/13/roadkill/Douglas MacIlroyhttp://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-6135417402813663662012-07-13T02:01:33.306-07:002012-07-13T02:01:33.306-07:00A powerfully-written tale, and I feel a deep sadne...A powerfully-written tale, and I feel a deep sadness etched into the community. "Grief-stricken sky" is a great line.<br /><br />Thanks for your comment on mine.<br />http://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/tideline-transitionAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-79352031575485339042012-07-13T00:50:25.386-07:002012-07-13T00:50:25.386-07:00You're most welcome.You're most welcome.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18149363845050477601noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-45583512131628921512012-07-13T00:39:11.628-07:002012-07-13T00:39:11.628-07:00Makes an impact! Hope it helps people stop smoking...Makes an impact! Hope it helps people stop smoking, or better yet, deters them from starting in the first place. Great story and great message.<br /><br />http://ebooksscifi.wordpress.com/2012/07/12/malignant-narcissist-by-ilyan-kei-lavanway-for-madison-woods-friday-fictioneers-100-word-flash-fiction/Ilyan Kei Lavanwayhttp://ebooksscifi.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-40741590117103476112012-07-13T00:36:01.460-07:002012-07-13T00:36:01.460-07:00I'm disinclined to believe Angela was the one ...I'm disinclined to believe Angela was the one who did it. But maybe her comment about his family was a diversion tactic in the face of guilt. I liked how the buzzard was a symbol and not the focus.C.C. https://www.blogger.com/profile/06070310862785263964noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-84277608340546867642012-07-12T23:50:04.794-07:002012-07-12T23:50:04.794-07:00Powerful theme, nicely told. Liked it.
http://...Powerful theme, nicely told. Liked it. <br /><br />http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/07/13/every-cloud-friday-fictioneers-july-2012/Sandra Crookhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00534491053812317718noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-59126523604345421012012-07-12T22:24:23.207-07:002012-07-12T22:24:23.207-07:00Great story! ...Strikes a mean cord. I've been...Great story! ...Strikes a mean cord. I've been trying to give up cigs for years! But, as a walking phlegm ball once said, "Either do or do not. There is no try." :) Anyway, check out mine, if you wish.<br /><br /> http://crookseyeview.wordpress.com/2012/07/11/this-aint-deal-a-meal/Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-24551676033499484862012-07-12T19:55:21.209-07:002012-07-12T19:55:21.209-07:00You hit a nerve Rochelle. Considering the current ...You hit a nerve Rochelle. Considering the current events and devastating wildfires lately, this touches too close to the truth. Good work. Thanks for visiting and commenting on mine.loranoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-20613264572422428842012-07-12T19:50:39.644-07:002012-07-12T19:50:39.644-07:00Thanks, Kwadwo! My that was easy.Thanks, Kwadwo! My that was easy.Rochelle Wisoff-Fieldshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00090374697915874481noreply@blogger.com