tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post300888240973421164..comments2024-03-08T08:33:02.582-08:00Comments on Paintbrush, Pen and Keyboard: SNARLRochelle Wisoff-Fieldshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00090374697915874481noreply@blogger.comBlogger37125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-27605922187842704582017-08-02T20:02:20.616-07:002017-08-02T20:02:20.616-07:00Dear Buddah,
That's a catchy handle. I'm...Dear Buddah, <br /><br />That's a catchy handle. I'm glad you enjoyed my story. I will tell you that I've ditched this site and moved it all over to Wordpress. You can find me and Friday Fictioneers here https://rochellewisoff.com/2017/08/02/4-august-2017/<br />Again. Thank you and Shalom,<br /><br />RochelleRochelle Wisoff-Fieldshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00090374697915874481noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-22626511396975393382017-08-02T10:13:48.590-07:002017-08-02T10:13:48.590-07:00Great details and lots of action. Well done!Great details and lots of action. Well done!Buddah Moskowitzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06839068145732552328noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-17746014006877308452012-08-01T07:11:38.267-07:002012-08-01T07:11:38.267-07:00Rochelle,
I must apologize for taking almost a ...Rochelle,<br /> I must apologize for taking almost a week to get here. This was a fast-paced, action-packed adventure. I truly enjoyed it. Beautifully complete in only 97 words.Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02951989303915273807noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-80507877505574225692012-07-31T18:30:09.693-07:002012-07-31T18:30:09.693-07:00Hi Rochelle,
A lot of twists and turns for 97 word...Hi Rochelle,<br />A lot of twists and turns for 97 words. I think I got whiplash. Thanks for reading and commenting on my story.<br />RonAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-33469919465829353512012-07-30T09:45:29.853-07:002012-07-30T09:45:29.853-07:00Ahh...interesting twist. Good dog! Great story! ...Ahh...interesting twist. Good dog! Great story! (Did she get the ring?! ;) )<br /><br />~SusanSusan Wenzelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05441251619321494571noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-52180098987794645342012-07-30T00:56:49.801-07:002012-07-30T00:56:49.801-07:00Wow, my heart was in my mouth and then you shocked...Wow, my heart was in my mouth and then you shocked me out of my complacency too - brilliantly written and one of the best this week :-)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-84230762393181313592012-07-29T07:19:01.336-07:002012-07-29T07:19:01.336-07:00This was wonderful, Rochelle! I love the way you c...This was wonderful, Rochelle! I love the way you completely turned the story around. One of my favorite philosophies: Don't judge a book by its cover. :)<br /><br />--Jan<br />http://janmorrill.wordpress.com/2012/07/27/fictioneers-flashfriday-gone-dry/Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-8848264814292233632012-07-28T17:06:12.259-07:002012-07-28T17:06:12.259-07:00Reminds me of the movie "The Sandlot". N...Reminds me of the movie "The Sandlot". Nice story!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07880002462186879806noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-79115492812083904832012-07-28T12:17:51.956-07:002012-07-28T12:17:51.956-07:00I think you captured everyone's hearts with th...I think you captured everyone's hearts with this story. Great tension and release. And after the weekend I had with Lottie (my pit grand-dog who had to be rescued) last weekend, I really appreciated the snake in the end ;)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-67059060935363386502012-07-28T09:35:18.026-07:002012-07-28T09:35:18.026-07:00worry for the girl becomes relief and praise for t...worry for the girl becomes relief and praise for the dog. <br />http://craftytara.wordpress.com/2012/07/27/it-seemed-like-a-good-idea-at-the-time/Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-89435303477302748622012-07-28T07:27:57.970-07:002012-07-28T07:27:57.970-07:00I won't lie to you. Sandlot heavily influenced...I won't lie to you. Sandlot heavily influenced this story.Rochelle Wisoff-Fieldshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00090374697915874481noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-43763850822054187472012-07-28T07:24:15.224-07:002012-07-28T07:24:15.224-07:00Loved the image of her heart "thrashing"...Loved the image of her heart "thrashing" against her ribs, and the turn at the end, making the scary guard dog into an ally (this reminded me a little of the Sandlot, if you know that movie). Nice job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-73573797416553161112012-07-28T07:01:11.573-07:002012-07-28T07:01:11.573-07:00Wow!
That's a lot of action for 97 words!
This...Wow!<br />That's a lot of action for 97 words!<br />This made a very good read! :)Parulhttp://faitaccompli.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-71665361905855239402012-07-28T06:18:09.226-07:002012-07-28T06:18:09.226-07:00Nice! The danger you expect, the danger you see, t...Nice! The danger you expect, the danger you see, the danger you don't see - and a happy ending.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-31276282651278139212012-07-28T04:35:55.707-07:002012-07-28T04:35:55.707-07:00good story, and I am always appreciative of the pr...good story, and I am always appreciative of the proverbial "snake in the garden" - as opposed to Grandma's "what big mouth" you have when she finds out the ring is gone. Ha.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-11261047013182451772012-07-28T02:48:29.776-07:002012-07-28T02:48:29.776-07:00Thank goodness he came good at the end... Tense. ...Thank goodness he came good at the end... Tense. Loved it..xAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-54872214076717988262012-07-27T19:23:00.159-07:002012-07-27T19:23:00.159-07:00Couldn't quite eek out a true em-dash, but did...Couldn't quite eek out a true em-dash, but did whack the dastardly commas. My editor, of my short story, anthology told me I tend, to overuse,,, them. <br />Seriously. Thanks for catching it. It's appreciated.Rochelle Wisoff-Fieldshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00090374697915874481noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-60369671239598740052012-07-27T19:18:46.781-07:002012-07-27T19:18:46.781-07:00Okay. I didn't see that coming. Beast turned i...Okay. I didn't see that coming. Beast turned into Prince Charming in a shining armor. Nicely done.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18149363845050477601noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-80514162019578431192012-07-27T19:00:58.661-07:002012-07-27T19:00:58.661-07:00You captured the tension very well. This was a co...You captured the tension very well. This was a complete short story and that's hard to do with 97 words. I like the image of the girl staring over at the junkyard dog and wondering what to do.Danny Bowmanhttp://glossarch.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-91651373611074020262012-07-27T18:36:33.210-07:002012-07-27T18:36:33.210-07:00Nice twist at the end. Happy she survived. I liked...Nice twist at the end. Happy she survived. I liked "Her heart thrashed against her ribs." I haven't run across thrashed used like that before. :) Be careful with punctuation (an em-dash would be more appropriate than a semi-colon after "worse"; commas aren't necessary after "but" or "the").Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-43157138001619918652012-07-27T10:48:10.318-07:002012-07-27T10:48:10.318-07:00Whew! You had MY heart thrashing! Nice story and l...Whew! You had MY heart thrashing! Nice story and loved the happy twist at the end!Mahjirahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04685917075106367032noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-24875912443305404292012-07-27T08:23:52.867-07:002012-07-27T08:23:52.867-07:00Hooray for the Pit Bull! Successful surprise endin...Hooray for the Pit Bull! Successful surprise ending--good story.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-9207286264382901752012-07-27T06:51:00.804-07:002012-07-27T06:51:00.804-07:00A lot of story in 100 words.
I loved he way you le...A lot of story in 100 words.<br />I loved he way you led us for fearing for the girl about to be attacked by a ferocious dog to suddenly the dog being the hero. Clever.<br />A great read - thanks.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-27691888713332096952012-07-27T06:49:46.851-07:002012-07-27T06:49:46.851-07:00Suspenseful and clever story. I never saw the snak...Suspenseful and clever story. I never saw the snake coming. Good thing the dog did. Great work!<br /><br />Thanks of visiting mine.<br /><br />http://ebooksscifi.wordpress.com/2012/07/27/kingdom-come-by-ilyan-kei-lavanway-for-madison-woods-friday-fictioneers-100-word-flash-fiction/Ilyan Kei Lavanwayhttp://ebooksscifi.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1987640389303631676.post-40306629828563142962012-07-27T05:52:52.794-07:002012-07-27T05:52:52.794-07:00Hurrah for animal heroes - and not the slithery ki...Hurrah for animal heroes - and not the slithery kind! ;)<br />Great story within so few words, well done. <br /><br />I didn't get the twist until I read Doug's comment; I didn't know a copperhead was a snake. Please keep them on your side of the Atlantic!<br /><br />You've already commented on ours - thanks.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com